Thinking of you
I make my soul naked
I hang my gown on you
I sew your pink lips to my mouth
I melt in you
Your warm breast milk pour in my hand
It’s makes me hot
I drink your milk
I’m a thirsty man
I touch you
Beneath white crumpled sheets
Our bed of loneliness
Perfumed by your scent
I close all curtains to the sun
And let in no light in the room
Except the light of your eyes
I close all doors
Except your mind
I know that you know
My unbearble past
I see no way out
Except my way to you
Somebody knocks
Your body is trembling
By : Hadi Khojinian
Edited by : Dr Ali Reaz Rahimi



Hey man, that was pretty…interesting. Kidding. I thought it was pretty good. Though the style seemed to me (a novice in poetry) to change in several places. I think it was the word choice in several places that makes me feel that way. If you’re interested I thought of some edits:
I sew your pink lips to my mouth
Your warm breast milk pour in my hand
It’s makes me hot
I drink your milk
I’m a thirsty man
And let in no light in the room
My unbearble past
Overall i thought it was good, conveying the emotions of a love song.